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    dots Submission Name: Your Wordsdots

    Author: mon28
    ASL Info:    29 /F /Montana
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 176/59/14
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 752
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       This piece needs help so feel free to tear it apart. I know what I want to say, I just can't get it written right.

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    dotsYour Wordsdots

    The connection is there between us
    Without saying the words
    I know where we stand
    When you love someone this much
    Actions speaks louder than words

    I see it in the times you place me first
    When you wait on me to get ready
    How you give up the occasional game
    Being there when it is important
    Letting me be right, well sometimes

    I see it in how you look at me
    That smile to let me know it is all ok
    The face that makes me laugh
    Eyes that show your full attention
    Intriguing looks for that special plan

    I feel it in the many touches that we share
    The kiss on forehead when Iím almost asleep
    Hugs before a brief parting, after a reuniting
    The grab when no one else is looking
    A cuddle that makes me all warm inside

    Just knowing the feelings that you invoke
    I feel, makes our connection even stronger
    The words do not have to come
    For me to know in my heart
    Where we are and how you stand

    Submitted on 2006-09-25 00:02:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey mon28

    Love for an individual can be difficult to describe on paper but you have captured your feelings toward this individual quite well.

    You mix free verse with the occasional ryhming sentence and that is fine. I think you need to find your own style. Speaking about feelings of love of another requires the unrestricted flow which is what free verse is all about.

    I enjoyed your work and look forward to more of it.

    'On On'

    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]

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