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    Author: naynay9_90
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 13/2/10
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       i wanna know were i went wrong to lose the best thing in my life, this is just me


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    dotsjustifieddots
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    Life is a blessing
    so why does it get so hard?
    my mind is stressing
    when you've moved away, so far!
    why is it me that is always the one to leave?
    or am i to take the fall?
    im over it! i'll wear this shame on my sleeve
    i am to blame, afterall
    the contrast of your love and hate
    brings my life crashing down
    but i cant fix this, its far too late
    crying slowly in water do i drown?
    do i live to tell the tale
    of how i had thw world, but let it all go
    should i continuing crying without fail?
    or should it be my feelings that i show?
    do i deserve a seond chance, my once best friend
    to fix the tears i put in your eyes
    or is it to the point, that we call it the end
    have our tears, we already cried




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 02:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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