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    dots Submission Name: Holding On.dots

    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       yeah. and i still love him, these days.

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    dotsHolding On.dots

    I let my mind goÖ
    Your eyes come to focus.
    Hold on to me now,
    And Iíll hold on too.

    Lying here in my bed,
    All I have is you,
    Together with me,
    And it feels as though Iíve never had more.

    You grip me tighter and I want to cry.

    All the things youíve told me
    And the things I think sometimes
    Are synonymous with death.

    But all the pain of the world
    Canít rip, tear, or bleed me
    From you now,
    Our bodies tracing this perfect symmetry
    That fits just right between us.

    Your arms around me, holding me,
    Mean more to me now than anything else could.
    I pull you in tighter and open my eyes
    To watch you gazing into my heart.

    I know now that I love you more than life or death.

    Submitted on 2006-09-25 06:57:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this. It is absolutely beautiful. And I agree totally with Ronswords..this was a very very powerful poem.
    | Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by sweetxoxosorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really powerful
    You captured that moment of eternal bliss perfectly and to your credit you did not get to graphic describing this relationship
    I really enjoyed this write
    This is strong and the choose of words really carried the emotion level of your theme perfectly
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    I have just added 2 new writes as well
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww!! This is so cute, I loved it! It reminds me of my boyfriend and I, where we could lay in eachothers arms forever if we wanted. You did a great job though, I wouldn't change anything about this. It's from the heart, as I tell everyone, those are the best kinds of poems :). Awsome job! Keep up the good work!

    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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