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    dots Submission Name: Overdosedots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOverdosedots
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    A needle in his arm,
    is all it takes.
    Reaching for that euphoric,
    drug induced state.
    But this time its harder,
    than ever before.
    Not enough drugs,
    he's gotta have more.
    Too much drugs
    is never enough.
    He starts feelin' quesy,
    gotta be tough.
    The vomiting starts,
    his vision goes black.
    He knows this is the end,
    his body goes slack.
    In the hospital bed,
    he lays comatose.
    Mentally dead
    from drug overdose.




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 08:32:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with porcelain, drugs do mess up lives, and I think that with this you're starting to express the importance of NOT doing drugs. (Unfortunately) I wasn't the first to comment on this, but I do feel that this was one of those poems where you stop and think and then tell someone who tells someone, who tells someone what you've said, or wrote or whatever. It's one of those that gets you to spread the word, " hey, drugs aren't cool, they kill you."

    So...nice.


    ^_^ Twisted
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Drugs mess up enough lives. It's a fact that would make you think it's going to be enough to make people stop being so stupid but nooooooo, why be smart when you can be dead instead. How cool is that? Good poem, educational. You expressed the thinking process very good. Rhyming is flawless and the whole piece flows really well.
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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