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    Author: lynn7
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 297/212/58
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 136
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       I just wrote this a few minutes ago. I don't feel that it is finshed yet.


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    dotsThis spacedots
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    This space is empty
    the place where I lay
    emotions are set apart
    but, Love is still alive
    with no strength to fight
    all the visions that come to mind
    to many roads to follow
    so I wait for it to all end
    before making my way
    with the puzzle pieces
    that have been given




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 09:56:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Lynn, yes, life can sure be a jigsaw puzzle sometimes, with some of the pieces missing. Perhaps you could consider expanding it a little more.

    Good write though.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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