Description: need a title need to add more im working on it im have trouble writing at the moment ARRRGH :P
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i know your there but i feel the distance
i know your there but you secice to be of existence
if i wanted to be alone i wouldnt need your assistance
i was lookin for the path of least resistance
my love will be for ever dont worry about the consistance
Huh, ok A little to rythmic for me. And I would devide the lines into 2 and put a brink between them that would make it work beeter. Also color and synonyms, you got emotion, feeling, and passion. Now just center it somewhat. Add a little extra for spunk and more interesting read maybe "i know your there but i feel the distance"... -"like the moon hiding beneeth the coulds"- Something like that, Idk, kep hitting it, you got enough to work with!
I know you're there, but I feel the distance. I know you're there, but you seize to be of existence. If I wanted to be alone, I wouldn’t need your assistance. I was looking for the path of least resistance. My love will be forever, don't worry about the consistence.
For a title, I'm thinking, Longing for Love. No, that doesn't sound good. I'm not sure really. Good write. ~Caotic~
Submission Name: these words(mean nothing)
