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    dots Submission Name: Oh Larry, I'm Comingdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 547
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       i only posted this because he told me to... not. ha ha. i would hav posted it anyways. mmm, it felt so good. uhh... i mean... *cough* uhh, yeah. so how's your day been???


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    dotsOh Larry, I'm Comingdots
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    You're so deep inside me.
    My body feels great.
    If I could feel this forever,
    It would be my fate.
    Oh baby, that spot.
    How did you find it?
    You're too big for me,
    Yet, somehow, you fit.
    Wait, now move faster.
    Oh fuck, please don't stop.
    Maybe later, when I trust you,
    Then I'll be on top.
    I can't feel my fingers.
    How did you do that?
    Oh God, I'm so close.
    You have my high stat.
    Do you know what I'm thinking,
    As I bite on my lip?
    I'm thinking of you,
    And my old leather whip.
    Don't worry sweetheart.
    If you can make me come,
    Maybe one day,
    You can replace my thumb.
    Oh shit, fuck me harder.
    Oh no, wait for me.
    Oh Larry, I'm coming.
    Do you see what I see?
    The colors are flying.
    Ask me next time.
    What am I seeing?
    Finish this rhyme.




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    ||| Comments |||
      heh....playful. The rythm to the poem almost mirrors the rythm used when having intercourse with another. Despite all of its lustfulness....I find it kind of cute.
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Sexy! Your a good poem writer and sexy poetry is always wecome!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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