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    dots Submission Name: My loves...Unloveddots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1001
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    dotsMy loves...Unloveddots
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    Lust...
    Eternity,evermore lost in seduction,
    Lifeless bodies flow through wind.
    Death, defience...
    dance inside the minds embrace,
    Nothing is accepted in ones own beliefs.

    Betrayel...
    Inside,personality,image,prefrence,thoughts..
    Body,soul and mind all insucurities..
    Misplaced,condemned...
    to apeal in others for acceptance,
    Change ones self for others.

    Violence...
    Depression,pain unhealable injuries..
    Self indulged cuts and burns sear today.
    Blue, streams..
    uncontrollable tears wept unnoticed in crowds,
    Uncontrollable fears, twisted and intwined inside.

    Tourniquet...
    Weapon, releaser take away the pain,
    No one cares today, unoticed they will remain.
    Blood, rains...
    off the beds of sadness and deception,
    Lost a thousand loves today through self unaccaptence.

    Tears...
    Brothers,sisters too many have lost to unclaimed emotions.
    Love is truly the worlds string to devotion
    Empty,insecure
    they who claimed to be loveless,
    Where loved more then the mother earth.

    Sadness...
    Painted,invoked by everything,
    Has agian left etchings of hate upon this world
    Blame, denial
    everything leads to the same ending.
    And as life continue for others who will..

    who will love those who left unnoticed...




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 15:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      impressive write....I love the style, an how the structure flowed. The rhyming was a nice touch...

    the topic of the write is sad to read about however....if i remember correctly you were going through a number of random issues...

    I hope things have changed for the better..An dont forget to talk to me online....Im still around


    maybe we can think of a new topic to write about together,

    Sincerely
    SINceer

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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