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    dots Submission Name: The Good, The Bad, and The Angstydots
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    Author: MyFairCalamity
    ASL Info:    17**I'm a lady**philly
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 115/67/16
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This isn't serious people... it's satire, so i'm claiming creative liscence.


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    dotsThe Good, The Bad, and The Angstydots
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    Oh woe is me
    Iím so lonely.
    Everyoneís mean
    Cause Iím thirteen.
    And no one knows
    How my life blows.
    I am so sad
    My life is bad,
    I want to die.
    (Thatís such a lie.)
    I whine and pout
    And scream and shout,
    So you will think
    That my life stinks.
    My knife cuts me
    So you will see
    How sad I am
    Because of ďthem.Ē
    My boyfriend left
    Now Iím depressed.
    We met online
    But now Iíll pine.
    I loved him so,
    Youíd never know
    This would have been
    Two weeks with him.
    Myself i'll kill,
    I swear I will!
    Iíll leave this world
    An unloved girl.
    Now this I vow,
    Iíll go cry now.




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 17:57:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this isnt bad kate. it amuses me. its exactly what i mean as i mock the little freshman(and many others). i guess when you said it wasnt good you meant like all deep and full of creative metaphors but F that. this brought me a smile inside that brightened my day.

    "Oh woe is me
    Iím so lonely.
    Everyoneís mean
    Cause Iím thirteen."

    maybe we're mean to them cause they're irritating.

    ''And no one knows
    How my life blows."

    thats true how they all think that no one could possibly understand what they're insignificant problems feel like.


    "My life is bad,
    I want to die.
    (Thatís such a lie.)"

    I swear im gonna kill myself(as long as i have your attention)


    "My boyfriend left
    Now Iím depressed.
    We met online
    But now Iíll pine.
    I loved him so,
    Youíd never know
    This would have been
    Two weeks with him."

    I think that this was my favorite part because it kept getting more and more ridiculous. Are you talking about the girl from our school who you overheard talkin?

    Anyway, i loved this. I love to mock the nuisances that seem to surround us everywhere we go and i love it when you do it too since you do it well and make me laugh.
    AWESOME


    ~Samm (of course)




    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok that was funny! I soooo appreciate the sarcasm. Angst and overly emotional is fine at 13. It's annoying at 22. And it's probably mental illness at 30. LOL

    annie
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful! ^_^ I wish I could find a similarly-themed peice I wrote when I first was becoming exposed to the "emo" among us. Gah. Anyway. Great sentiment, wonderful satire, and great rhymes beside!
    "And no one knows
    How my life blows."
    That captures it all right there. I will let you know if I find my old peice, but it would pale next to this anyhow. It made me smile, and not much I find here does that.
    "I'll go cry now"
    Ha! I love it.
    Sorry I don't have any suggestions: this is just too good.

    Malinda
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by mordrelaballe | [ Reply to This ]
      lol haha Interesting one. I love satire, and I hate the angsty.
    (Best title ever, by the way.)

    I have many things to say, and nothing but time.
    [censored]. That marching band is back.

    Anyway, I suppose I'll start at the beginning.

    "Everyoneís mean
    Cause Iím thirteen."

    Haha [censored] idiots. You know, they could be thirteen and wise beyond their years... but I hate it when they're not and try to act like they are.

    "My knife cuts me
    So you will see
    How sad I am
    Because of ďthem.Ē"

    Hmm... I don't think it's the action that's bad, it's the way they flaunt it that pisses me off. People shouldn't do that for attention, because for other people it can be a sick addiction that they can't break and for them, it doesn't have anything to do with the sadness that "the angsy" complain about.
    If you ask me, you can tell what kind of problem someone has with that by how well they hide it.
    (Sorry, I have a lot of opinions on the subject. lol I'll stop now. Haha maybe I should talk to my therapist more.)

    "My boyfriend left
    Now Iím depressed.
    We met online
    But now Iíll pine.
    I loved him so,
    Youíd never know
    This would have been
    Two weeks with him."

    Ooooo that makes me so mad. How ridiculous can someone be?
    Those [censored]ers wouldn't know love if it bit their fingers off.

    "Myself i'll kill,
    I swear I will!"

    Haha do it!! (lol sorry)
    If someone was actually gonna kill themselves, they wouldnt tell anyone, cause they wouldnt wanna be stopped.

    "Now this I vow,
    Iíll go cry now."

    lol They should suck it up. I mean, I cry all the time, but do I try to make people feel bad for me? No. Thats ridiculous.

    *deep Party Boy voice* Those angsty kids are so dramatic.

    They should all just be overmedicated and happy. In fact, thats how the whole world should be... just like me

    HAHA!!!

    Thanks for the favorites add.

    I love this. It's about time someone made fun of them people.


    Peace out friend
    -nikkki

    "Russian police are stern... stern, but fair." haha
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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