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    dots Submission Name: The Rag Dolldots
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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is a poem about watching someone you love struggle with addiction to heroin. This drug kills many people of all ages everyday, and it had almost claimed my best friends life. This poem is dedicated to him, and his life threatening struggle to to ultimately and forever quit heroin.



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    dotsThe Rag Dolldots
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    Drive my face to a grindstone.
    Break me at the knees.
    Same affect as you to this...
    The Rag Doll showed your destiny...

    That of little pricks
    And swollen lies
    Stilhouettes
    And prying eyes
    Speachless fears
    Into space you'll stare
    Forever doomed
    To this horrifying nightmare

    A Screaming Silence...
    An echo in your head
    Once one rides over
    The Beast must be Fed... again?
    That soothing force
    The blood rushed Fist
    One Smack to the brain
    And you slip into Bliss

    The Blossoming Rose
    The Ultraviolet Limbo
    A flick of the Rig
    And off you go
    Follow the Tracks
    The vertical lines
    Through the channels they lead
    To Your Decaying End Time

    A Hero-in life?
    What do you want to be?
    A scaved out Junkie
    Doomed to die in a Dream
    Your better then that
    And You've proven that fact
    You've put down the needle
    And got the fuck up off Your back

    Best of luck with your New Journey Brother.
    I cant wait to see.
    How much Healthier and Stronger You'll be.
    We've been through it all.
    We've survived through The Storm.
    Memories of shame, and memories adored.
    We've soared the highest hills
    And fell in the darkest holes.
    We'll talk about this shit some day
    While sharing a fat bowl.
    It's goodbye for now.
    But only for awhile.
    We'll meet up again.
    And reak havoc on this fucking town.
















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      again.......sweet, this is good stuff, i love the long ones that take a while to read....goin to the favs along with the others!
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      touching stuff. you care a lot for this person obviously. your friend is one of the lucky ones, it a tough battle. it spirals so quickly outta control.......urgh, it really is a nightmare for all concerned. glad he is on the right road now tho'.

    anyway, your poem.......it has a good rhythm, flows nicely. you've thought long and hard about it, the different effects this addiction has are very clear, another good one. has he read this?
    i gotta feel sorry the town concerned when you guys meet up again..........
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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