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    dots Submission Name: The Graduationdots
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    Author: nephthys
    ASL Info:    17/F/U.S.A
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 10/6/6
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 115
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 384



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    dotsThe Graduationdots
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    Two children playing on the field behind the stage,
    running past the numbers twenty, thirty, and forty.
    Graduates facing their future in matching caps and gowns.
    Distracted by the children,
    reminded of their younger days.
    The children, unaware that they are causing a scene,
    continue to play,
    as the graduates watch
    and dream.




    Submitted on 2006-09-25 21:21:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good piece, I like it. I got a very clear visual of children playing tag and laughing in the football field and just everyone in the audience and on stage watching with smiles. It reminds me of my graduation, no I didn't enjoy high school and if I could I would have done a lot of things differently but there's no sense in wishing the "what might have beens". I wouldn't change anything about this piece, it's very good. Keep up the good job :)

    ~Cris
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]



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