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    dots Submission Name: The Winds After You've Wokendots
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    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Winds After You've Wokendots
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    Branches snap beneath a heavy foot
    And I feel you drawing closer
    Through static roots

    I once moved in grace and beauty like the sun
    upon your lips and in your heart
    until the day was done

    As the shadows crept in and I bathed in the night
    You were there to hold on to the best of my light

    So you came to me at midnight hour
    when the Earth was cool and wet
    You whispered softly with your touch
    then with your eyes you set
    A burning fire within my heart
    I one time would regret

    For what am I now?
    Where is the light that once played upon
    my most eager and subtle green palms

    I am the ground, I am the branch that has fallen
    I am all that is slowly sinking into the Earth

    Yet from this place I still hear your footsteps
    It is all that I know for certain
    Beyond my own slow journey back to the Heart

    For just a moment I can feel
    The warmth of daybreak on an Angel's heel

    As ruslting wings go softly by
    I leave the ground and kiss the sky
    But that is all I kiss and this is why

    Our dreams wrap around one question in flight:
    Is heaven a place that lies outside the light,
    Or will starry climes render our bright Love slight?

    I still hear you drawing nearer
    and taste the words you've spoken
    And I'll never leave without, at least
    The winds after you've woken.




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