[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: for youdots

    Author: naynay9_90
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 13/2/10
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 892
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 690

       please comment,,, this is for my soul mate, someone i love and lost this goes out to you babexoxoxox may our souls rest in peace

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsfor youdots

    gasping for air
    a silent tremble does quiver
    fear surrounds me, as it starts to get dark
    its cold, i begin to shiver
    seeing him hanging form the rope
    i fell to my knees, blood shed tears
    his body slender, attached is a little white note

    forgive me for leaving
    i know your dying inside
    i wished i could help you
    but these tears i have cried
    if it wasnt for you, i dont no where i'd end up
    you are my everything, you are my love

    well now he is gone
    as i walk behing the hurse
    why me? i repeat over and over
    louder as i rant and curse

    Submitted on 2006-09-26 05:46:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]