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    dots Submission Name: Catching up to medots
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    Author: longwinterdays
    ASL Info:    21/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204/190/64
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       The more that i try to forget everything that has happened in the past, the more that it tries to catch up to me.
    I just want to forget, but it wont let me


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    dotsCatching up to medots
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    I can't sleep
    and it begins to catch up
    ....catch up to me

    I awake after ten minutes
    frustrated at my thoughts
    not being able to understand
    them myself

    I can't sleep
    not one hour, not one minute
    .....and it's starting to catch up

    i hear the voice
    controlling, hurting
    ever so sensitive
    it cuts me just so

    i can't sleep
    it all begins to catch up
    ....catch up to me

    take it away
    my heart is hurting
    i'm trying
    but i can't let it go

    i can't sleep
    not for one minute, not for one second
    .....and it is starting to catch up

    it shattered
    cut me so deep
    quite literally
    the blood, it comes....and i am bleeding

    i can't sleep
    its all begining to catch up
    ......fucking catch up to me




    Submitted on 2006-09-26 11:40:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems to me that there are moments you want to never forget, that go away so easily. The ones that you try so hard to let go of, always seem to have a tighter grasp. I too have a past I'd rather not mention, but it haunts me just as yours seems to as I read this. I'm not the type to speak of my problems or express my feelings about my past, so I hold alot of praise for your strength in dealing with those things and being able to come out with it. So far, with the poems that I have read of yours, you seem to be able to show yourself quite willingly, and you always do such a great job with your words. More than just your words, but yourself as a person, as a writer, you're truly inspiring.

    (By the way, I don't mean to sound so corny lol, it's just my thoughts as pure as I know how to say them.)
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey longwinterdays

    Some things will never go away

    I hope this forum helps in some way because people on this site are very good listeners and some even have very good advise.

    The repetition in your work tells me that you have been frustrated by this recurring emotion and its like it will eventually consume you.

    The cutting is a feeling you are putting out there strongly. The physical pain must have been a lot ot handle. You are now dealing with the psychological. Good luck

    Get help if you can.

    'On On'

    Ocker
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]


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