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Catching up to me


Author: longwinterdays
ASL Info:    21/F/WA
Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204 /190 /64
Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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The more that i try to forget everything that has happened in the past, the more that it tries to catch up to me.
I just want to forget, but it wont let me


Catching up to me



I can't sleep
and it begins to catch up
....catch up to me

I awake after ten minutes
frustrated at my thoughts
not being able to understand
them myself

I can't sleep
not one hour, not one minute
.....and it's starting to catch up

i hear the voice
controlling, hurting
ever so sensitive
it cuts me just so

i can't sleep
it all begins to catch up
....catch up to me

take it away
my heart is hurting
i'm trying
but i can't let it go

i can't sleep
not for one minute, not for one second
.....and it is starting to catch up

it shattered
cut me so deep
quite literally
the blood, it comes....and i am bleeding

i can't sleep
its all begining to catch up
......fucking catch up to me




Submitted on 2006-09-26 11:40:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It seems to me that there are moments you want to never forget, that go away so easily. The ones that you try so hard to let go of, always seem to have a tighter grasp. I too have a past I'd rather not mention, but it haunts me just as yours seems to as I read this. I'm not the type to speak of my problems or express my feelings about my past, so I hold alot of praise for your strength in dealing with those things and being able to come out with it. So far, with the poems that I have read of yours, you seem to be able to show yourself quite willingly, and you always do such a great job with your words. More than just your words, but yourself as a person, as a writer, you're truly inspiring.

(By the way, I don't mean to sound so corny lol, it's just my thoughts as pure as I know how to say them.)
| Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey longwinterdays

Some things will never go away

I hope this forum helps in some way because people on this site are very good listeners and some even have very good advise.

The repetition in your work tells me that you have been frustrated by this recurring emotion and its like it will eventually consume you.

The cutting is a feeling you are putting out there strongly. The physical pain must have been a lot ot handle. You are now dealing with the psychological. Good luck

Get help if you can.

'On On'

Ocker
| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]


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