Effectively Defective

Author: rememberplaydoh Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 78 /103 /60 Words: 38

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Effectively Defective

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Effectively defective, functional dysfunction, compelling force of fear, useful inabilities restrain. Attractively repulsive, wholesome pervertedness, loving hatred all-consuming, darkness' light ruling the mind. Exuberantly miserable, decisive indecision, driving urge for self-destruction, strength of weakness holding sway.

Submitted on 2006-09-26 11:50:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The words of the poem are a collection of described states of mind, given in contrast to each other, juxtaposed on the one hand to contrast, yet easily joined on the other to portray a "lost" feeling. Most people would lean towards a vote of contrast on the comparisons, but some on a given day might feel like combining the good/bad elements into one confused feeling. This might not make for their best day, but the trap has been set.

| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

hehe...i liked this one. i wrote a couple peices like this, but i can never find them but yes, the state of your mind on any given day, but also-this reminded me of... what's that thing called again? depression, or more like down-syndrome. the CHAOS in the Chaos Theory. the BANG in the Big Bang. the title says enough in itself, so does your journal, so does your shoutbox post LOL...if you need someone to talk to, or just vent something that's too personal to do so w/others, just drop me a line sometime. *lights a smoke and walks off* Loquettish Marionette <--(lol) i make up my own words now

| Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]

An exercise in contradictions, this could easily be describing a state of mind on a given day. I would have (by compulsion) attempted to "brick in" a definite pattern of some sort, but on second thought the existing scattered effect adds to the mental painting's idea here by emphasizing the generally "lost" aspect. Needless to say, I would not/could not have written this work, but it's nice to read what other's do.

| Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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