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Evanescent Adjacency Sometimes, these nights are so cold, even when the heat's scortched and my blankets thick I can't help but dream of your warmth; the angel that resides in me when you're long gone. On nights like these, I'll gladly take any piece of you. Chaotic is my life, when you're not there to share the seonds, passing ever so slowly. And when the curtains are drawn, I can see your silhouette pressed against my sheets; as my fingers grow nearer, your shadow grows colder, only to disappear when I try and take a piece of you. These moments, so fragile; between dawn and its creators as the stars disappear, only to come to life in your eyes. But as the light illuminates us, we must return to our celestial state taking a piece of you with me. Our desires shaped and understood within our depths. As much as we long for our solid selves, it's hardly ever there Reality: evanescent like our hearts one day to be reunited once more, but for now, we have to love each other as ghosts. So simple it seems, but I feel your aching through the miles. No need to worry, you have the key to my heart. Artificial are our understandings of this distance between compassion as our bodies long for eachother in an innocent fashion. But for now, we have to love eachother as ghosts and I know sometime's that's not nearly enough but remember always, you have the key to my heart. With this, you can have any piece of me. |
Longing makes for a long night? I liked this peace and it tuged on the heart string a bit. Anyway great write!!! Kelley frost | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ] | Nice I like this alot I love the way you pretty much wrote a dark love poem about loviong this man as a ghost I can imagine that a long distance relationship is hard especially when you think about them all the time and long for them when days are bad very nice and heartfelt | much LOVE JAmes | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ] | Hey. I loved this. It was well written and captured that feeling excellently. I have never actually felt that way, but I can imagine. One spelling error, if you reread you will find it. Awesome job(again) and keep writing. | ~Caotic~ | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ] | awww. Thats exactly how I feel with my boyfriend gone. He just left for college 7 hours away and it has really taken a toll on me. So this poem really hit home. I tink it shall be a fave! | | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ] | even when the heat's [scortched] and | ![]() my [blankets] thick ![]() when you're [long gone]. ![]() ![]() grows colder, only to disappear when I try and [take a piece of you]. and... On nights like these, I'll gladly take [any piece of you]. ![]() But for now, we have to love [eachother] as ghosts ![]() but remember always, you have the key to my heart. and... No need to worry, you have the key to my heart. ![]() well, overall, after the first 2 stanzas, i was really drawn into this piece. great diction, metaphor blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah... quite heartfelt, an endearing read. look forward to reading more from you. and those grammatical and syntax errors do correct ![]() Loq Mind | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ] | |