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    dots Submission Name: *Pleas Of Affectiondots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 741
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    Description:
       i wrote this poem for my boyfriend on his birthday...just tell me what u think..~Caotic~


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    dots*Pleas Of Affectiondots
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    Look into my eyes and dont look away,
    Hold my hand and dont let go,
    Let your lips gently graze mine,
    And make wishes of a wonderful tomorrow.




    Submitted on 2006-09-26 14:02:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This write is a short but very personal view of how you share your Love with your boyfriend
    I can definately tell you both are looking forward to a long term relationship
    My only advice would be to not jump to fast into adulthood
    Remember your youth is gone before you lnow it and you will never get it back though you will be trying to your whole adult life
    I cant help but think with a little more words an emotion this write would be more powerful but I stress thats totally up to you
    I would never tell someone how to write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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