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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: allyjt
    ASL Info:    14fc
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 3/2/3
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 586
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 324

       i just want to live

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    i wish there was a simple button
    *poof* and im gone
    but there isnt
    i have to deal with this idiotic day to day
    why do i have to pay?
    its not my doing
    not my faults
    ive done nothing wrong
    dammit leave me be
    i just want to hide but they keep telling me dont

    Submitted on 2006-09-26 14:30:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this. because its really effortless, which is bad and good. bad because its poorly constructed, but also good because it is poorly constructed. does that make sense? as in, what you have written would be a contradiction if you had made it well structured and worded better. You're saying, you want to be 'gone' and don't want to 'have to deal with this idiotic day to day', so there is no point in trying to make your poem sound good. which, i think, is what actually makes it good. i don't know if you meant for that effect, or if you even put that much thought into writing this, but it's the way it made me feel when i read it.
    top banana.
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by southernswagger | [ Reply to This ]

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