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    dots Submission Name: Sleepdots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 550



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       this is something i just kinda came up with it's totally random...i don't even really know what it means to me...so what does it mean to u...what do u think?


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    dotsSleepdots
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    The clouds start rolling in
    The sun is setting
    My eyes are closing
    my beat is slowing
    My mind is tired
    My body's sore

    I want to stop thinking
    I want to stop feeling
    Just for an hour,
    or maybe a lil more

    I'll just close my eyes
    I'll just go to sleep
    I'll feel even better
    If this lasts forever

    The clouds are rolling
    The sun is setting
    My eyes are closing
    I am sleeping
    I am safe




    Submitted on 2006-09-26 18:54:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aaaah, lovely poem, Kat!
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      To me Kay this is about well to me I think it's about how you settle down to rest and dream and it takes you away to a better day sorta thing I liked it it rhymed kinda but it don't matter but hope your doing well love ya
    - Crys
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]


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