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    dots Submission Name: This Place Is Not Heavendots
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    Author: His goth child
    ASL Info:    15/male/Loserville
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 82/79/45
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsThis Place Is Not Heavendots
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    Heaven does not lie in the clouds
    If it were true I would be there
    When you pray, you pray to the wrong place

    The rain you love to play in
    Is really my tears,
    The sun you bathe in
    Is my anger I pour out on you,
    And when the clouds hide my hate
    Something is tearing at my heart
    Leaving me broken inside,

    Here comes the rain...

    Ever wounder why the rain is cold,
    Why the sun burns your skin,
    And why the clouds prelude the rain,

    How dare you forgett me
    You left my memory for another,
    Well I hope he hurts you
    And breaks you into two,
    How can I wish that
    Wasn't it you I died for

    Here comes the rain...

    Please don't cry for me, I'm sorry
    I guess it was just my time
    And I'm sorry, Can you forgive me
    It was I who left you





    Submitted on 2006-09-26 19:24:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      MMM... am I correct in saying that darkwinged read it wrong? It's about people and how we have turned our back on God. But I don't quite get th e part about his anger reining down-- God's wrath ended with the death of His Son. The second to last stanza talks about how Christ layed his life down for us, adn the last a repentence of a person in relizeation of his wrong? Correct me if i falter.
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I <3 it...at least the beginning. I started reading it, and i was like...I NEED to read this out loud. So i did, and my friend was like..."awesome!"
    And i agree.
    The beginning breaks into my thoughts, makes me think about it.

    "Ever wounder why the rain is cold,
    Why the sun burns your skin,
    And why the clouds prelude the rain"

    The ending on the other hand...you sort of move from talking about the weather to talking about the one who wronged whoever.....(This is what i interperet from it....) ANd then the speaker went ahead and killed himself for it?

    Not too shabby tho.
    Maybe even a fave...dispite the ending.

    <darkwinged>

    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]


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