Gone

Author: Poetic Ways Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 9 /24 /26 Words: 100

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Gone

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An eternal rest, A life long test, Answers impossible to be discovered, God takes for keeps, We're left to weep, The lies never uncovered, Eyes full of dismay, These thoughts astray, The hopes departed, No one left to care, Few to shed the tears, No grieving from the cold-hearted, The truth becomes visible, The outlook miserable, The misery drowning the helpless, Denial begins to arrise, The lord ignores these cries, And suddenly life becomes selfish, A reason for everything, doesn't mean good is the reason, So tell me why when we lose so many, we're expected to keep believing.

Submitted on 2006-09-26 21:58:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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this is amazing i love it! keep this up! <3

| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]

i really liked it and it's all true.. great write.. keep it up

| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]

nice. got the message accross nicely

| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Daniel_moore | [ Reply to This ]

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