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    dots Submission Name: i love himdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       i love him so much. its so hrd. i feel as if he doesnt feel the same and it hurts. sometimes i know he loves me. othertimes its harder to tell. he said that sometimes he doesnt like me. i'm sorry. i try so hard to be what he wants me to be. he wants me to be myself. i'm trying. i dont even know who myself is. i wish i knew. if i did, things would be so much easier. its so hard. i dont know how to feel. im so in love but so confused. dont think about anything except him anymore. i do something swrong and i think of what he will think when i tell him.


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    i told him that i love him
    all he said was, "fuck you"
    what else can i do now
    except for feel so blue
    my life falls to pieces
    i'm dying inside
    the tears are now streaming
    i'm sorry. i tried
    how do i change this
    what now can i say
    i gave you my all
    now i feel so gray
    please just be happy
    i try to see the light
    i know things get hard
    but you'll be alright
    things will get better
    for you now at least
    i'm really not that bad
    its just my inner beast
    i try hard to do things
    that you want me to
    please try to hear me
    when i say i love you
    i mean it in my heart
    i'll say it right now
    i love you my honey
    what should i allow
    should i let you be with me
    when you're not okay
    or should we start over
    some other day




    Submitted on 2006-09-27 17:44:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a poem that all girls can relate to and sympathise with you about. The best thing to do is move on, I know itís hard, it was for me too, but as soon as you're over them you realise they really aren't worth your love and tears.

    Linzi xx
    | Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]
      last year i felt what was written in the this poem. I loved someone to the point it hurt and in return..i got [censored]ed. I liked this poem alot.

    Lady D
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      The same thing happened to me not to long ago, and I've moved on with my life
    lizzie
    good write
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]


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