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The Victim


Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 228 /213 /53
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Very amateur I realize but I needed to channel my frustrations and this was the only way I could do it. I understand that it might be a bit confusing but its how I feel. Forgive the cursing but trust me the way I feel excuses that.


The Victim



Tell your pities and your woes to someone else
I am tired of listening to your pleas

I give you my shoulder
And you strike me from behind

There is not much to say
Today all has been revealed

Just leave me alone
Its all I ask of you

Stop telling the world you are a victim of its cruelty
In reality we are all a victim of you

Know every time I think about you I am filled with a rage

I hate myself for ever believing any of your words
Please leave me alone and don’t make this any harder

I can not bring myself to forgive everything that you have done
This is the last straw

Leave me alone
Don’t direct any word to me

Leave your pities and your woes to someone who cares
Because at this point I really don’t give a damn




Submitted on 2006-09-27 22:23:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey Karen,
I told you that every time I saw a pink rose, I would think of you. Well, I have been over on WritersCafe.org and a lady has been reading some of my stuff. She has a pink rose for her Avitar, and it made me think of you.

This piece is very well done and shows me that you care very much about this person. But when Rhet said that line to Scarlet...He said he didn't give a damn, not that he didn't love her!
| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
  I understand how you feel and it wasnt confusing at all. What she did was something shall never be forgotten. I am glad that your work is going well. I know that we dont see much of each other but I want you to know that I am here. Thank you for expressing yourself this way and I know it was difficult not cursing her out but I am very proud of you for taking the higher road.

another thing good luck today at the thing

I hope you do well.


andy
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  My poor little ana, what has happened? You know I'm here to help in anyway I can; I know I'm far away but my support and comfort cross thousands of miles.

I really like that you cursed "damn," you are such a rebel now! Its better to not hold stuff in and just let it out. That is what most poetry is about no?

So say what you feel! Yes a bit amature but you get stright to the point without it being confusing.

| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Snowball_24 | [ Reply to This ]
  To be honest, i didn't see no cursing. You were just angry in a very graceful and sophisticated way. Some of us express anger in such a way that it cannot be accepted even after we realize how wrong we were just to burst in such a way.
But you've expressed yourself like any other decent being would express their anger.

There were times when i expressed anger like this and i didn't take it too well. I had broken my phone so many times because i couldn't tolerate other people telling me how badly they felt when in reality you were the one who was feeling bad because of them. Yea, it happens and you just want to be left alone because of that. You say all those things because although you claim not to care, this person has hurted you and deep down you do give a damn or else you wouldn't have reacted like that. But seriously, not giving a damn sometime relaxes you and being plain honest as to how you feel makes you feel better.

I can only hope this anger has ceased and that you're feeling better.

Do take care....
~Irina
| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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