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    dots Submission Name: I Love Youdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 324
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 658
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    dotsI Love Youdots
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    i have to tell you how I feel
    It hurts soo much to see you with her
    Knowing that I had a chance to be your gurl
    But my stupid mistakes ruined my life again
    I wonder how many times I have to bleed to make me feel betta
    This razor blade is my only friend the only thing that heals my pain
    With one quick cut I loose all the hate I had for you
    A few short minutes and im feelin weak
    If only you gave me a minute of your time
    I wouldn’t be layin here ready to die
    My face is white and my breath is getting shorter
    I wish you were here to hold me
    But instead the hot water of the bath is my only warmth
    I lay here watchin the water slowly turn red
    As my strength fades away my will to survive slowly dies
    If only u knew how I felt I wouldn’t be here
    It’s hard for me to breath as I slide under the water
    I refuse to take a breath
    This world will be better off without me
    One less gurl in this big world
    And none of her stupid little problems to worry about
    Im sorry it had to end like this
    Wait why am I apologisin you hurt me
    Im sorry for takin the time to actually care about you
    For ever thinking that you would like me
    As my world turns black I want you to know
    That you are the only person I have ever really cared about
    You were the reason I slept at night
    You were the reason I woke up in the morning
    But since u have gone I have nothing to look forward to
    My love for you has torn me up inside soo much
    That I can’t stand to live any more
    So with my final breath I whisper I love u….




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