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My Biggest Mistake


Author: RJCHANDLER
ASL Info:    30/F*GA
Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 44 /68 /23
Words: 296
Class/Type: Poetry /Betrayal
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i am currently on medication to prevent me from killing my ex


My Biggest Mistake



Ten precious years I wasted

The biggest mistake of my life

Losing touch with myself and reality

Being your perfect, submissive wife..

Most nights after being with you

I ‘d get sick or violently ill

when you touched me I’d throw up

And somehow, I survived that hell

You lied to me, and broke promises

like a fool I would always believe

Even more foolish for staying

when every day I wanted to leave.

I know I never loved you

And now it’s you I hate

It scares me to think that I

Almost repeated my worst mistake

I have nothing left for you

no love, no patience or respect

Just the very sight of you

gives off a negative effect

I know you will never change

you’ll never be more than what you are

An inconsiderate, selfish, sorry, no good loser

Leaving the kids and me with no car

Refusing to pay me child support

And accusing me of things untrue

I thank God everyday

That I am nothing like you

Still I worry about the children

I know the disappointment they will feel

When , like me, they finally see

your true colors you will reveal

A self righteous arrogant fool

who uses , betrays and lies

Who make promises and breaks them

False intentions and alibis

My purpose on life is clear

I know what I must do

repair the damage you create

So my children are not like you












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  Ooooo... I truly, honestly have chills. This is not an empty compliment. My divorce was final last Thursday... he hasn't contacted his kids in over a year... I could have written that "Ten precious years I wasted", watching my children come to the realization that their father is a piece of crap. I can't say enough how much I feel this. And the rythym is slap on! Awesome!
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
  its always the hardest thing to do, isnt it. to clean up other people's messes. at the moment my BF is cleaning up the emtional debris left by my mother, when she ruined my life, adn im having to coem to terms wih my mental illness, probably aggrivated with the conditions my mother subjected me to.
hope the meds dont effect you too adversly.
your lines about being sick were a little too repeated.

Most nights after being with you

I ‘d get sick or violently ill

when you touched me I’d throw up

the i'd get sick or violently ill are kinda the same thing, and throwing up is normally replaced with violently ill. try and find something to replace it with, just to make this peice easier to read.

an honest piece. good work.
evelyn
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this. It really showed anger and resentment without having to read inbetween the lines. I think its horrible that you were trapped in such a sad marriage and now you will be connected to him for life through your children. i hope things get better. try not to kill anyone.
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]


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