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    dots Submission Name: broken vowdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       sometimes the greatest battle is with yourself.


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    dotsbroken vowdots
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    He swore to fight,
    never again.
    But to save his wife,
    anger must win.
    Last time he fought,
    almost lost his soul.
    But to protect her life,
    he must lose control.
    For their sins,
    they will bleed.
    With his knife,
    he will end this deed.
    If they wanted to live,
    they wouldn't have hurt her.
    To end this strife,
    he will commit murder.




    Submitted on 2006-09-28 13:11:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn, I'm never the first to comment on your things! *mumbles under breath* but however, I do agree that sometimes the greatest battle is the one within ourselves.

    Great job!

    ()_^ Twisted
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, what do you know. I get to have the first comment too :-) . Blood, gore, sin...you got it all nice and juicy. As always, great job. I actually like this one the most. It's the intensity and darkness I suppose. Keep them coming.
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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