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    dots Submission Name: Be Yourselfdots

    Author: forgottendesire
    ASL Info:    23/Male/AL
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 6/12/9
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsBe Yourselfdots

    Zombies are what you are
    You let this world control you
    Direct your path of life
    Idiots are what you are
    Living in a box, a room
    with no doors, and not windows
    no way out, or is there?
    don't follow the crowd
    and go your own way
    be different, be unique
    let no one control your life
    no one but yourself
    paint your own path
    and let no one stop you
    for when you do this
    you will understand the true,
    the absolute meaning of life.

    Submitted on 2006-09-28 14:10:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      paint your own path
    and let no one stop you
    for when you do this
    you will understand the true,
    the absolute meaning of life.

    If we could do that, then there wouldn't be a purpose to living. The wording of this piece, doesn't give what your feeling true justice. Be more vivid and more intrigued when you write words and the true emotions that you are feeling will come out, instead of this rant that you have basically created.

    Other than that, I understand where you come from. People are so used to just doing day by day routines, that they sometimes forget how to feel, how to hurt, and sometimes just how to have fun. When you lose that feeling, you have lost yourself.

    If we knew why though, we wouldn't need to keep on living. Life is full of mysteries.

    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]

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