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    dots Submission Name: Going For a Ridedots
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    Author: whendt
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 902/387/108
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       This was a reminder of love in the spring time and how we love our cars. LOL


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    dotsGoing For a Ridedots
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    As she lies on the hood of my new Camaro
    Her red dress rises to her hips
    Her lips pucker from the ecstasy
    The mood reflects the moon light
    She moans as I touch her inner thigh
    I left my driving gloves on
    She love the feel and smell of leather
    Her engine revs and steam escapes her mouth
    The cold night air fogs up the windshield as her bare back touches it
    Goosebumps rise on my arm as a cool wind blows
    My mouth waters for the taste of her cherry red lips
    Her leg start to quiver
    She reaches down and grabs my gear shift
    Hardened steel
    She is wet now from a cool spring rain
    I climb into her and adjust my ass for comfort
    The ride at first is smooth like Corinthian leather
    Then the ride gets bumpy and she goes from a purr to roar
    She shifts my gear shift to a faster gear
    The ride at high speed makes your heart race
    As I round her curves she reaches top speed
    We reach the top of the hill together
    By accident I blow a gasket
    Fluid rushes out from the bottom of both of us
    We pull over and let everything cool down




    Submitted on 2006-09-28 16:10:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's hot. I like how it's sexy but not trashy.
    Hah I love all the car references.
    The wording is amazing.

    Your talent never fails to fascinate me

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! I don't really know what to say here but Damn!
    Gets me all hot...LOL!
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      very sexy.......i like the erotic feel to this. it does get the blood pumping.
    think i'm blushing!! lol
    very nice work,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the sexual induwindows if i spell that right lol well the punns and the relationship between the car leaves something that reminds me of the ancient greek play Lysistrata definately something that great poet could of wrote if he new a camero and a lady in red
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a long time since I blew a gasket but I remember it well. A nice piece of passion/erotica. PS I want a Camaro.

    Donald
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      A...ummm...can't talk, too turned on :-) . No really. F***ing hot.
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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