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    dots Submission Name: *When We Were Youngdots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots*When We Were Youngdots

    Playing and frolicking in the leaves.
    Laughing and giggling in the sand.
    To be a kid again and have no worries,
    About being accepted and looking good.
    When mommy dressed you in the morning,
    And everyone was your friend.
    Now we are stuck pretending to be what were not ,
    Just so others will like us for who we are trying to be.

    Submitted on 2006-09-28 18:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol. very tre, a comical carefree piece, yet there's something depressing about the whole thing though. It takes me back. nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by mikepyro7 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so very true
    I know through my own life when one becomes an adult they are always thinking back to the memories of their innocent youth when everything was so good and no matter what there was always our parents to lend a helping hand or needed comfort to us when we were feeling down
    As we get older so do our parents and they dont have the strength as much to do all the things they did to help us when we were children
    I think of my Mother as the Best Friend I will ever have in the World
    Never ever will I Love another as much as I Love and respect that woman
    She is my Rock and she is my World
    You brought back a beautiful memory to mind of me at around 5 years old helping her pick up the leaves that had fallen from the front tree
    And me always climbing it trying to get as high up that tree as I could get
    I Thank You for bringing back those memories
    An Excellent Write
    I very much enjoyed this
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      "Now we are stuck pretending to be what were not ,
    Just so others will like us for who we are trying to be."

    as i said before in the last comment. you say a lot with few words.. and i kind like this writing .. but it was very slow in the begining and with a lot of energy at the end.... well i know you can do it better.. so keep writing and do not forget to read my stuff.. take care
    have a nice day
    and peace and love
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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