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In Your Eyes

Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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umm... i wrote this in 2 minutes so don't be too harsh

In Your Eyes

When I look in your eyes
I see my hopes and dreams.

No one else in the world
can be on my team.

When I look into your eyes
I see a place of no harm.

I picture me with you
picture me in your arms.

When I look into your eyes
I see a person so true

the one i want to be with
forever with you

when I look into your eyes
I see the world.

I see who i really am
and i know i'm your girl.

Submitted on 2006-09-28 18:29:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i can really relate. i was with this guy and all that i was, all that i am is in his eyes. i think your poem is great. it shows so much truth.
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by always_confused | [ Reply to This ]

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