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    dots Submission Name: Broken Angeldots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       Something I just threw together.

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    dotsBroken Angeldots

    I was alone in my own hell
    But she broke down all the walls
    Her wings flying oh so fast
    To catch me as I fall

    Cutting through the darkness
    Eyes stinging from her light
    She came again to save me
    For it was me I was trying to fight

    Her smile was so perfect
    In her presense I could fly
    How could I have possibly known
    It was all such a big lie?

    Her light began to fade
    Her wings were torn and broken
    Then suddenly she vanished
    My true words left unspoken

    I tried to look for her
    But the scenery stayed the same
    Would she hate me for her sadness?
    Was I the one to blame?

    But I finally found my angel
    Weeping soflty on the floor
    So tired of this world of lies
    She could take it no more

    I tried to hold her close
    To tell her it's okay
    I wanted her to see I cared
    That I wanted her to stay

    She told me to live on for her
    As she slowly closed her eyes
    Why did she have to leave me alone
    In this lonely world of lies?

    She'll never get to learn the truth
    The saddest truth to know
    How many tears I cried that night
    That night I let her go

    Submitted on 2006-09-28 18:29:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When you come up with a title for this poem please let me know so I can add it to my favorites list!
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my gosh, this is such a beautiful poem... it almost brings tears to my eyes! You are a very talented writer, keep up the great job!
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure I understand this but perhaps it would read and look better broken out into verses. What do you thin k?

    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]

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