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    dots Submission Name: Hardly Phaseddots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 905
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    Bytes: 607



    Description:
       to an ex that thought i'd miss him once we were through, but sadly he was corrected.


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    dotsHardly Phaseddots
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    For once my heart
    can't feel the pain.
    You tried to break it,
    drive me insane.

    It's been hurt so bad
    the times before,
    this time my heart
    just begs for more.

    It's been through this
    so many ways,
    the wounds are numb,
    it's harldy phased.

    Come end our love,
    but over time
    i'll wear this smile
    and be just fine.

    Your pain's just begun,
    this ain't even half.
    Only you will cry
    and i'll have the last laugh.




    Submitted on 2006-09-28 18:39:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. It flowed well, it rhymed very nicely, and the structure was good. I liked this alot, mostly because I can relate to this exactly. I have no critizism for you this time, sorry maybe on the next one. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]


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