Waltz of Death

Author: Mr. Creep ASL Info:    16. Female. Here Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96 /177 /112 Words: 103

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Waltz of Death

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Grasp my heart with softly spoken words, take my life away. Dance with me underneath the moon, for I'll be dead by day. Sing to me a lullaby, one that reaks of death. Whisper words of love to me, Before I take my final breath. I wish we could fly through the clouds, with eyes filled with bliss. I want your arms around me tight, I want your restless kiss. In my dreams this is how it ends, to me never is to long. Problem is tomorrow I could die, and you would'nt notice I was gone...

Submitted on 2006-09-28 19:40:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The only thing I can say about this piece besides WOW is that you have two misspelled words. wouldnt doesnt have an e in it, and tomorrow has two r's. other than that, this has been one of the best i have seen on here. i absoluetly love it!

| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Emo_Doll | [ Reply to This ]

Holy [censored] man that is sick (meaning it's awesome) Where did you get your inspiration? FreeBird

| Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]

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