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    dots Submission Name: hatedots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 784
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 992



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       i dont know what this is supposed to mean but i just wrote it coz me n mah bf are fighting hopefully it makes sence and i will prob add onto it l8ter


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    i hate the way you make me feel
    the way you leave me sitting here all alone
    your stupid games are more important then me
    an your not afraid to show
    i hate it how your alwaiiz wrong
    you never argue for wat u believe
    i hate it how im crying now
    and you really dont give a fuck
    the world is more important
    then they way you feel about me
    i wish it wasnt obvious that we will neva be
    there is so much diffrent between us
    and now its startin to show
    my eyes are really red now and you still havent asked watz wrong
    how obvious do i have to make it
    that ur tearin me up in side
    every word you dont say hurts more then everyword you could
    i just want you to hold me
    and tell me everything is ok
    but i dont think that is going to happen
    so i sit here quietly
    wiping the tears from my eyes
    hoping you come kiss me and everything will be ok again




    Submitted on 2006-09-29 08:26:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      so sad...but probably better off without that...
    excellently convey your emotion in this piece~
    nice work Stacey keep it up!! :)
    | Posted on 2006-12-19 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]


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