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    dots Submission Name: Thoughtsdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThoughtsdots
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    I sit here
    And I must say my thoughts...
    Dark
    Gloomy
    Dreadfull
    ... nothing good can come these thoughts
    yet .. I consider..
    Do I put action behinde these words
    So unsettled..
    My actions in front of you are so deciving..
    I cannot lye to you
    These words I speak are true..
    Although my actions..
    I would not trust..
    So I shall sit here and question...
    My thoughts.. and the actions I may bring upon them..
    do I simply leave these words
    Shall i allow them to lye here
    Within the state of "thought"




    Submitted on 2006-09-29 14:37:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if these thought are dark, gloomy and dreadful, then i think they should stay as thoughts rather than be put into action! i like the struggle portrayed here,too. it's like your trying to control these thoughts, but not quite getting there.
    nice work,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job. I like the struggle between them being just thoughts, or becoming more. well done
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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