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    dots Submission Name: Those Golden Daysdots
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    Author: Lavender
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 101/125/59
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 662
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    Bytes: 450



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       I wrote this in the seventh grade. Enjoy...


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    dotsThose Golden Daysdots
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    I remember those golden days
    when we would walk to the park.
    Oh, how many hip-hip-hoorays!
    Just like at the end of Noah's Ark.
    I remember those golden days
    when we would watch the rain fall
    while we ate some Lays
    sitting in front of the mall.
    Too bad those times have gone,
    they have all slipped away.
    Even though they're gone,
    I still remember those golden days.




    Submitted on 2006-09-29 20:17:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]
      This isn't bad, I guess. I think it could be a little longer and more descriptive personally, but it's still nice. Like, there are some questions that could still be answered: How does the narrator feel about losing those golden times? Why have they gone?
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]


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