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    dots Submission Name: Skydots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1421
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 705



    Description:
       Goddesses:
    Inanna - Queen of the Sky (Ancient Sumer)
    Frigg - Goddess of the sky (Scandinavian)
    Nut - Represented the heavens (Ancient Egypt)
    http://www.factmonster.com/ipka/A0768471.html

    Aditi - Goddess of the sky (Hindu)
    http://www.hinduwebsite.com/hinduism/concepts/aditi.asp

    Nyx - Godess of the night (Ancient Greek)
    http://www.theoi.com/Cat_Ouranioi.html


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    dotsSkydots
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    I have known her
    As Aditi, Frigg,
    Ianna, Nut, Nyx
    And many other AKAs

    I awake to a sky
    Dressed in
    Reversible bright
    Lazuli robe
    When she turns it
    Inside out it is
    an ebon fabric
    Revealed to have
    Uneven polka-dotted
    Holes which
    Let light poke
    Down at me

    I admire her attire
    But my aspiration is
    To see her naked
    And touch the pulse
    Of her heart
    As I search for
    Secret spots of sensation
    Tangling bodies together
    In satin sheets
    On an embroidered
    Pillow layered
    Bed of eternity




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      Aww...bless Chrys, she would love this, it's beautiful. I love how you decided to personalize her in a way, and it was so lovely. She's so beautiful, and so is this poem, and I think it really did her justice. I love the way you describes as "Lazuli robes", and turned inside out, it was ebony, with polka dots on them. It's such a beautifull poem, I love this. Yay to her, and to you too!!
    Blessed be, Namaste.
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem about the sky. A most interesting way of expressing your admiration and love for such a beautiful thing. I love the sky, often sit and admire her beauty at different times during the day and she never ceases to amaze and delight my senses with a neverending show of colors and variety of "attire". So many people seem to get overwhelmed with their daily life that they neglect to notice and appreciate the true beauty that surrounds them. I take time out of my day just to take in all that I can from nature. It is one thing that is always there, free, and absolutely priceless. This is a very sensual and soft poem. Nicely written and expressed.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I hadnt read your work for some time and thought i should come and have a look...im glad that i did ...this is beautiful...it has a lovely softness about it and a femininity..which makes your play on words even more seductive and sensual to me...im adding it to favs,, :)
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh, making love to the sky.
    Makes me want to go out and view the sky at this very moment.. and see what I can see. lol

    This is a soft cloud, seeping of sensuality.

    Nice wordplay!

    Enjoyed!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm to get there and never leave, well that is certainly a fine aspiration. Make love to the Goddess for all time is you can.
    I think she is a willing lover, none better.

    It's personal taste, but I think there is a better way to describe
    your touch for the Goddess than G spots, even secret places to touch that she loves. But that led me right into the mechanics of love and felt like a let down. And that is strictly personal, and relates to the tenor of the poem. Not my feelings as a human by any means. I like my erotica in one piece, if that makes sense.

    This is gorgeous and I'm going to fave it, thanks for sharing,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful write Chrystine where you describe your Love for the sky and all the secrets she holds in perfectly
    I understand the reference to Loving the Sky so much that you feel you are in Love with her form
    Beautifully said Chrystine
    It is always a Pleaseure to go to your page and have your words stick to my mind and Heart to help prepare me for a Positive day!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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