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Author: beatthedrum
ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Inanna - Queen of the Sky (Ancient Sumer)
Frigg - Goddess of the sky (Scandinavian)
Nut - Represented the heavens (Ancient Egypt)

Aditi - Goddess of the sky (Hindu)

Nyx - Godess of the night (Ancient Greek)


I have known her
As Aditi, Frigg,
Ianna, Nut, Nyx
And many other AKAs

I awake to a sky
Dressed in
Reversible bright
Lazuli robe
When she turns it
Inside out it is
an ebon fabric
Revealed to have
Uneven polka-dotted
Holes which
Let light poke
Down at me

I admire her attire
But my aspiration is
To see her naked
And touch the pulse
Of her heart
As I search for
Secret spots of sensation
Tangling bodies together
In satin sheets
On an embroidered
Pillow layered
Bed of eternity

Submitted on 2006-09-30 11:34:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aww...bless Chrys, she would love this, it's beautiful. I love how you decided to personalize her in a way, and it was so lovely. She's so beautiful, and so is this poem, and I think it really did her justice. I love the way you describes as "Lazuli robes", and turned inside out, it was ebony, with polka dots on them. It's such a beautifull poem, I love this. Yay to her, and to you too!!
Blessed be, Namaste.
| Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a lovely poem about the sky. A most interesting way of expressing your admiration and love for such a beautiful thing. I love the sky, often sit and admire her beauty at different times during the day and she never ceases to amaze and delight my senses with a neverending show of colors and variety of "attire". So many people seem to get overwhelmed with their daily life that they neglect to notice and appreciate the true beauty that surrounds them. I take time out of my day just to take in all that I can from nature. It is one thing that is always there, free, and absolutely priceless. This is a very sensual and soft poem. Nicely written and expressed.

| Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  I hadnt read your work for some time and thought i should come and have a glad that i did ...this is has a lovely softness about it and a femininity..which makes your play on words even more seductive and sensual to adding it to favs,, :)
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooooh, making love to the sky.
Makes me want to go out and view the sky at this very moment.. and see what I can see. lol

This is a soft cloud, seeping of sensuality.

Nice wordplay!

| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm to get there and never leave, well that is certainly a fine aspiration. Make love to the Goddess for all time is you can.
I think she is a willing lover, none better.

It's personal taste, but I think there is a better way to describe
your touch for the Goddess than G spots, even secret places to touch that she loves. But that led me right into the mechanics of love and felt like a let down. And that is strictly personal, and relates to the tenor of the poem. Not my feelings as a human by any means. I like my erotica in one piece, if that makes sense.

This is gorgeous and I'm going to fave it, thanks for sharing,

| Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a beautiful write Chrystine where you describe your Love for the sky and all the secrets she holds in perfectly
I understand the reference to Loving the Sky so much that you feel you are in Love with her form
Beautifully said Chrystine
It is always a Pleaseure to go to your page and have your words stick to my mind and Heart to help prepare me for a Positive day!!!
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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