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    dots Submission Name: you made a bastard child with herdots
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    Author: Ardious Maximus
    ASL Info:    17/f/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 5/6/3
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 852
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    Bytes: 522



    Description:
       older guy makes me feel special.. breaks my heart when i find out he has two kids with two other girls.. moved away so i could forget


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    I  guess it's true
    S ince you're not here
    T here is no thought of you
    I 'm now in the clear
    L ost the fantasy of us
    L ost the scent of your cologne
    L ost your number, plus
    O ne day you too will be alone
    V enting you from my life
    E nded great for me
    Y ou stabbed me like a knife
    O ver again, but now I'm free"
    U nleashed from my mistakes




    Submitted on 2006-09-30 11:35:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like that. so many statements saying how you are now ( almost as if your telling yourself for you) and they all stem from one solid thought (i still love you). great job and not all of us older guys are bad. so once agian great job and good luck
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that. so many statements saying just how better off and they all root from "i still love you" Cant say havent been there before (not with a guy though, lol) but we aint all bad and good write and good luck
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that. so many statements saying just how better off and they all root from "i still love you" Cant say havent been there before (not with a guy though, lol) but we aint all bad and good write and good luck
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Gop | [ Reply to This ]


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