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    dots Submission Name: I Am Shedots
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    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 451
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Just a poem that is supposed to be about me for creatinve wirting


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    dotsI Am Shedots
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    I am the daughter of brute men
    She is the descendant of ancient warriors

    I am the conqueror
    She is the victim

    I am the belnd of two virtuous empires
    She is the bastard of two different worlds

    I am not from here
    She is is not from there

    I am the border that seperates
    that leaves out
    She is the people that find a way in
    to be

    I am Chicana
    She is politically incorrect

    I am the desert
    Dry, vast, thirsty for grandeur
    She is the ocean
    Deep with hidden teasures

    I am the voice of the masses
    She is just a number in a census

    I wll not be faceless
    She and I will stumble, fall, fail
    and succeed

    Because
    I am She
    And
    She is Me.

    2006




    Submitted on 2006-09-30 12:08:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow very spellbinding.
    Two sides of the same coin, which way will you land?

    I love this and shall savor it among the others.

    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how this is done with multiple couplets followed by a triplet or a quatrain. It gives me a sense of frantic speaking, for some reason. It has an erratic, but... aesthetically pleasing
    rhythm.

    "I am Chicana
    She is politically incorrect"

    I like that line. I'm actually not sure why, I just think that it sounds really cool.

    "Because
    I am She
    And
    She is Me."

    Perfect ending to this poem. End of story. I've always liked poems where it ends as the person the narrator of the poem was talking about is/was his or herself.

    Nice write.

    Stygian
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Stygian | [ Reply to This ]
      Who i like that. It's cool how you show the different personality traits. The way somethings are opposite and others are the same. It's like tearing someone in two and making a ven diagram of them. It's very descriptive and totally pulls you in. It is one of those poems where you can't just read a stanza or two you got to finish it. Nice work.
    pEAcE
    Liz
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]


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