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    dots Submission Name: *First Datedots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots*First Datedots
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    Putting on my favorite outfit,
    Primping my hair,
    Doing the finishing touches of my make-up.

    I heard the doorbell ring.
    I wait until mom calls my name,
    Telling me my date is here.

    My first date!
    I slowly descend the stairs,
    Just seeing him standing there makes me smile.

    We got something to eat,
    Then went to the movies,
    And he walked me home.

    At the end of the night,
    He gave me a kiss,
    Lips so soft and sweet.
    I weakened all over.

    Told me he would call,
    And guess what?
    He did.




    Submitted on 2006-09-30 12:45:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Heyo! Mandimara here. I can see just you sitting in your room rushing to get the last bit of make-up on. lol. I sooooo hope that that is what my first date is like! I can't wait... I'm hoping I'll get the courage to ask him to the Hallowe'en dance but I probably won't...lol.
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by Mandimara | [ Reply to This ]
      *lol* Never had a date until I was almost married, so I can't really relate, but it reminds me of my sister when she was younger.
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
      my first date was a movie and a pizza in the cab on the way home, sounds sucky, but it was a night i'll never forget!!
    this is very sweet, i can feel the excitement in the last 3 lines...he actually called!! lol
    how many times have we heard the line 'i'll call you'?? too bloody many.......or is that just me??
    anyway, i love your account of your first date, it's so sweet it's delicious!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an Interesting write where you take us on a journey into your first date
    You bring back good memories to me of my first date and to be honest it almost went the same way
    Those days are long gone for me but to be honest I remember her friendship very well
    Donna where ever you are I hope And Pray Life has been Good to You
    God Bless
    Ron
    Thanks for bringing me back once again to some memories that have helped me move forward
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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