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    dots Submission Name: Eye for an Eyedots
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    Author: FreeBird
    ASL Info:    16/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 32/34/25
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 93
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 425



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       I was bored and had a lot of energy when I wrote this.


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    dotsEye for an Eyedots
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    The blade will fall with bitter remorse
    He's at the end of his lifes course
    He took away my one, my only
    Now my life is empty, I'm lonely
    I took his life, he made me sad
    He took my love it made me mad
    Ending him didn't make me happy
    My love's still gone I feel crappy
    She can't come, to her I'll go
    To be with her my blood must flow




    Submitted on 2006-09-30 13:38:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed the ending. You set it up then nailed it. Killer poem man. lol, no pun intended. ok maybe a little one.
    Take care and peace out
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by HOGG4245 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats really good. It sounds like this person means a lot to you. She may be gone but that doesn't mean you have to let her go in spirit. I'm sure wherever she is, she still feels the same

    Best wishes..Write on

    Denny <33
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by given_belief | [ Reply to This ]



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