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    dots Submission Name: Things Learnt of Love and Rejectiondots
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    Author: newerachild
    ASL Info:    15/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 19/28/18
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 178
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    Bytes: 1436



    Description:
       Ahh, the things we learn from love and rejection about ourselves.


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    dotsThings Learnt of Love and Rejectiondots
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    I've been going about this love thing all the wrong way,
    I've never been one to show you what's hidden deep away,

    From day one it has always been:

    Here I am,
    At my worst,
    Come get me,
    Cuz I ain't one
    to make the first.


    Now,
    Let me show you who I really am.
    I've always been one to hang with the fam.

    I've never been one to say enough was enough.
    If you like it rough, shit, that's tough.

    Women are a beautiful thing in my eyes.
    From the head to the tummy and the toes to the thighs.

    I'll never treat you wrong,
    I won't even snap that thong.

    But you got it wrong if you don't think I'll rise,
    Rise to the occassion of your foul treatment,
    Your games of manipulation and your heart of cement.

    I realize now, that I can't ask you,
    "Am I worth the effort? Am I worth the time?"
    When I haven't even given you a sign.

    A sign, A sign, of who I REALLY AM.

    From today on it will always be:

    Look at me,
    I'm at my best,
    I hope that I'm
    as good as the rest,
    And I hope that my best,
    is worth my worst.




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      I never thought you went through the love thing the wrong way. But we're over, so I guess I can't say that anymore.

    this made me sad.
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      And isn't this the problem with dating, anyway? It's not real. Either you only show the person yourself at your very best, which isn't real, or you overcompensate in rebellion to that and have a kind of "well, this is what you get" attitude, which also isn't real.

    And then when it all goes wrong, we wonder why.

    I can't say I was really crazy about the middle stanzas of the poem, the ones about enough is enough and snapping the thong. Those stanzas felt rather crass to me. Almost like you're trying to say, "I'm a gentle guy - but not too gentle." I'd rather you just went for the gentle guy. But then, maybe that's just me.

    Thought-provoking write. Thanks for sharing. mae
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]



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