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    dots Submission Name: I smiledots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 406



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    dotsI smiledots
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    I wander along, smile on my face
    Wondering how long it will take
    to tame this new taste, for love to slow time and space.

    This smile over my tongue
    for bells yet unrung
    Children unborn
    For a love and friendship unscorned

    I smile.
    Exploring not lost.
    For something
    that will always be cherished
    and never forgot




    Submitted on 2006-09-30 22:40:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      good i have been trying to get hold of a real girl so that i can start feeling like your poem men it nice to know that other poeple feel the same way
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      i enjoyed reading this it grabbed my attention and pulled me in.
    It felt from the heart and good imagery
    Good work
    Thanks for sharing
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a very well written peom, but personally it made me a bit depressed, reminding me of something I myself am missing...

    Your rhyming at first gave the peom an interesting rhythm that make your piece almost catchy, allowing the reader to flow into each line. Emmersing themselves within your writing.

    Way to go!
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]


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