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Abused


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
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I thought I did pretty good with the rhyming in this one, but let me know what you think. I wrote this one a long time ago.
I've never been physically abused by my parents. I'm lucky compared to a bunch of other children out there.
This goes to all those poor kids who are afraid to speak up. My heart goes out to them.


Abused



Fear crosses over her face
she runs trying to find a hiding place
but he is too fast for her little legs
he grabs her from behind, ignoring her begs
she cries aloud, but no one hears
it's been the same routine for so many years
yet she's still afraid of what he will do
by tomorrow she'll be all black and blue
tears escape her eyes, and roll down her cheeks
she becomes too tired, she becomes too weak
he throws her across the room, into a wall
nothing is there to break her fall
another injury she'll have to hide
and another secret she'll keep inside
there is no way out, she's in to deep
maybe he'll hit her too hard, and she'll fall asleep
and hopefully she'll never wake again
then her living nightmare will come to an end




Submitted on 2006-09-30 23:29:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very well written. I imagine that you have a close experience with this to have written it so well and I can feel the pain that is expressed throughout...I am sorry for your pain and as a survivor i can only say never give up hope and there is help out there even though it is as scary as hell...for you or whomever it is that is going through this...keep writing...you write well and no doubt it helps....stormy
| Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  This is one of the best writes on abuse I have read yet
Your words carry all the emotion and fear a little child running away from abuse would be feeling
Im telling you I became so angry and physically sick reading this
Why do parents have children if all they are going to do is treat them like a punchimg back
I will never ever understand this
And Please dont even get me started on all the other forms of abuse sick and demented parents give to their children
iTS SO SICK!!!!
Society has to do something and do something quick about this problem
Why do they think more teens are commiting suicide and are more depressed then ever
I am making this write a favorite
For much more reasons then one
I hope I can help you help other people read this important write and people can realize just how hurtful and harming Child Abuse truly is
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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