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    dots Submission Name: Dirt Boydots
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    Author: dax
    ASL Info:    35 male BC Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 127/127/42
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 117
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    Bytes: 699



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       as Julius Caesar said " Et tu es Brute' "


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    dotsDirt Boydots
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    The future of my world
    and hope of my dreams.
    I asked her and she told
    me to ask her father's blessing.
    The fatal wound was struck
    as I heard the words issuing forth.
    "You don't have anything to offer anyone!"
    In disbelief I tried to comprehend
    the injury treacherously dealt.

    I avoided her to my best when years later,
    she imagined that she had made a move,
    and thought that I would recognize,
    her supposed undying love,
    And said loud enough in scorn,
    a second stab into my heart
    "He'll never get married!"
    looking down on me that day.




    Submitted on 2006-10-01 04:33:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm, wonderfully bitter, quite a cold and sober write here. regardless, the title is something to note, as it was what caught my attention.

    i was always fond of adding "boy" to any adjective, noun or verb.. to a certain extent pronouns too.

    something about "boy" that gives it a nice ring.

    this piece though, given its tone, is almost prosey, but i like it... sounds like a direct page from the book of your life. all well and good man.

    peace.

    -pietro
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]



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