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    dots Submission Name: 70 Word Short Story "Quite Quietly"dots
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    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 298/176/37
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Story/Nature
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       this was originally on my blog- not there anymore though, because as all can plainly see, its out here. anyway, this was inspired by many many other things, most notably an insanely trippy song called "quite quieter than spiders". enjoy.


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    dots70 Word Short Story "Quite Quietly"dots
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    A spider chanced by another spider in the heights of a renaissance cathedral.
    “Hello there,” said the spider to the other, dangling in mid air quietly.
    “Fascinating these humans, are they not?” asked the first.
    “No, not really.” answered the second.
    “What do you know about humans?” quivered and queried the first with curiosity. At this, the second spider traipsed away quite quietly, quipping “They have terrible taste in architecture.”




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      hmm, arachnid architecture? what an interesting thought! hah, now i am thinking of spider frank lloyd wrights and i.m. peis.

    now that i do think about it, spiders are the architects of the natural world. their webs are greatly intricate and well-constructed while also purposeful and efficient. no wonder one would think the over-the-top renaissance cathedrals are in "terrible taste."

    the only thing that bothered my pedant self was several missing commas. but i enjoy your alliteration; i've noticed it in some of your other writing as well. and you capture the spiders' characters perfectly: one excited, youthful, and energetic, the other nonchalant and more jaded. this is excellent proof that you don't need to write pages upon pages to impart brilliance.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]
      I immediately smiled at this because I find it very cute and sweet. Don't take it as though I'm belittling this piece..on the contrary! You have written something that many do not think of within most of their lives hehe, and what a thought it is to think about: Spiders and their amazing ability of creating a unique type of architecture so delicate yet maintained as their survival...it's fascinating. I really enjoyed this..You are a deep thinker :)...

    Take care! I would love to read more of these thoughts so keep writing! I feel as though you are very wise =P

    ~darkrose16
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by darkrose16 | [ Reply to This ]


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