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    dots Submission Name: The last time I'll trust a womandots
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    Author: Mr_Eff
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 61/62/39
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 134
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       All my effort for love and a woman was futile. It turns out she's a lying two faced cunt. The end.


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    dotsThe last time I'll trust a womandots
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    Lashing out, the slashing route, simply put, I lacerate/My razor sharp tongue will cut a swath through our last debate/Told to go fuck myself, raising the bar on how I masturbate/After this much getting shit on, jesus christ, a man just has to hate/I'm pass the gate of suffering, and in a whole new class of hate/Inevitability is the truth, so I have to take a pass on fate/Eager as a beaver, in other words I'm fast to mate/Fogging up my judgement, ensuring my pain exhasperates/Fuck me, fuck you. Is it a surprise I've been this crass of late?/My anger is rock solid, adding to this already massive weight/Love turned to shit before I got to enjoy it's passive state/A dumbfuck, who was dumbstruck, by what I thought was a lass of great/Integrity, and dignity, but April Fools! I guess the past was fake/Every dream dies the moment the dreamer has to wake.




    Submitted on 2006-10-01 16:15:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      [censored]es man... cant live with em without going ape [censored]. and more than the last line was serious, i feel it through and through. but me and you, we arent so different. remember the only weapon we have left in a [censored]ed up society... apathy.
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by DBC | [ Reply to This ]
      Every dream dies the moment the dreamer has to wake...my favorite line. though if i wanted to be a brat about it, people Do have daydreams... but meh, i still love the line.

    i like your play on words ex. DumbFck, DumbStruck...gives it an edginess as you read it... the only complaint i really have is the format. i think if you played around with it a little you could give it a visual lashing as well as verbal.

    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Never Known | [ Reply to This ]
      damn....i like the re-use of the same multi-syllable..

    You definetly got your feelings out it seems even though you limited yourself with the same rhyme...NICe work


    The last line was serious

    Keep it up


    PC
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]



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