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Jail Bound

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
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Words: 126
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Jail Bound

Stare into my crooked eyes
see my face all battered and bruised
It tells the tale of man bound and tied
I want to breathe and breathe others breath
I walk through the country side
wondering what is to become of me
i see horses wag there tails
and cows head down in the grass
if only i could be as calm as nature
i want to steal that feeling and make it mine
but i live fast in the streets
i drug myself to kill the pain
it is a concrete jungle not meant for any man
i fight in these streets
but my mind wanders to better things
my mind takes me places
my imagination drags me away from the dismal

Submitted on 2006-10-01 16:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Makes me want to get a six pack and listen to Johnny Cash. Also reminds me to stay outta trouble best I can....
| Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]

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