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    dots Submission Name: **Lonelydots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 751
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1036



    Description:
       Just, as usual, something I threw together. My first lyrics so be honest. Thanks.


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    dots**Lonelydots
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    Met you on the subway
    Will I ever see your face again?
    Once broken heart
    Mended at one touch
    Of your lacy fingers
    Your sweet perfume
    Hovering under my nose
    Then it was time to part

    Chorus:
    I Fell into loneliness
    Lost my grip on you
    Falling through the cracks
    Once patched with our affection
    But I have let you slip
    Gone onto better places
    And you, you took my wings with you
    But now your lonely too.

    Saw your eyes watching me
    Made me wonder how I set you free
    From this world
    Keeping me captive
    From seeing your smile
    Calling your name
    Hoping you’ll come back once again
    Unleashing me from my pain

    Chorus

    I miss you
    I want you
    Come back to me please
    Hold you
    And save you
    I beg on my knees
    Love you
    Forever
    Don’t let my heart go
    Oh….o…

    Chorus




    Submitted on 2006-10-01 17:23:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ... Oh my! You dirty girl! Falling in love with perfect strangers in the subway... out of all places!

    --- Ahem. Yes.

    Well, it's not very catchy. Maybe if I heard it with a tune or a ditty or a ding-dang-dong. Yes. The greatest songs are very catchy. Take for example songs from The Smiths, or The Kissing Comfits or yiddih-yaddah-blahblah what-have-yous. Unless of course you're going for a more metal genre... ...which I doubt...

    Have to go. My top hat's on fire.

    Yours truly,
    Nobody.
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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