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    dots Submission Name: against the trafficdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    verse 1:
    i don't like walking
    on that wild side of life
    i'd rather walk against the traffic
    then walk with the flow
    and get swept away
    i'd rather be safe
    so i'll play my hand
    with the cards i'm dealt
    cause if i lose
    well it's lifes own fault

    chorus:
    don't tell me to take a chance
    and risk it all
    cause you don't be there
    when i fall
    taking chances means getting hurt
    and for what it's worth
    i'd rather keep my tears

    verse 2:
    i don't like standing
    on the edge of that cliff
    for if i was to trip and fall, i
    would fall to nothing
    and be left for dead
    i'd rather be safe
    so i'll play it smart
    and stand far away
    cause if i fall
    well it's not my fault

    verse 3:
    i don't like thinking
    all those dangerous thoughts
    i'd rather keep my head screwed on
    then to let it fall
    have it lost for life
    so i'll think it straight
    and think it all through
    cause if i lose
    well it's my own fault

    coda:
    i don't like walking
    on that wild side of life
    i'd rather walk against the traffic
    then walk with the flow
    cause taking chances means getting hurt
    and for what it's worth
    i'd rather keep my tears
    i'll be walking against the traffic




    Submitted on 2006-10-01 17:42:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good. It makes me think of that one song about staying on the sidewalk because of something someone did. Yeh anyway, good write, verry original. I'd love to hear it put to music. Yet again Good piece, keep writing Kriss.


    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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